Emerson

In my opinion, this poem was drowning in description and left me for no room to feel anything. It came off as wordy and packed full of images, rather than ...

I liked it =D I really only have two complaints: dripping hopeless , dripping neglect Hopeless what? If you want that to be a none it should be 'hopelessness' or ...

I loved it. The crazy captain who strongly believes in only the captain going down with the ship. As always, you write with the best of skill. He sighed, clear ...

This poem really anything for me. I suppose it was three stories, all about people's demise? It just didn't work, IMO. Also, you had no punctuation at all. Poetry and ...

The beginning of this was very list-like, so it didn't work. And, then it turned into a story in verse form. I highly suggest you turn this into a story: ...

I really enjoyed this. (As always.) My favorite part was this: God is betting I’m going to fall, fall past the pines and their seven kinds of needles, past the ...

It was good, poetic, but I didn't feel anything and so... I'm not really sure what to say? I can't really grasp what you were trying to depict and show...So, ...

Ah, poems with emotions... These are always interesting to critique. Well, yes, it's short. That doesn't leave much room for....much of anything. The one thing you really, really want to ...

ah, it seems to have been bugged again? Very odd.

It worked for me. Thanks Nate, and Jack, very much. You put so much into the site =D Now go enjoy camping!

I agree with Jenna, it looks like there is too much going on, and your skin is white in comparison to the background, which makes the contrast really odd. But, ...

eek.... Brad Emoticon: ='[ Wowers. That's all I have to say.

UPDATE 6/12/07 So, short stories. Yeah. I'm pretending I never wrote Deep in Mud so I don't have to edit it xD I'm absolutely horrified over how I need to ...

left all their boats and Boston boats in Boston, yes? husband and life? husband and wife, I assume. --- I read all this earlier, but I can't remember what I ...

Happy birthday Jenna! *hugs* hope you have a lovely day of aging ;-) And don't be too pessimistic about it.