Emerson

It was too wordy for me. But that's really all I can say. I couldn't exactly pick up on the meaning.

The last stanza is unneeded IMHO... "My heart skipped a beat" - Cliché This had some nice lines, but I think you could add more imagery. Make it pretty, more ...

I liked this--it was subtle, and had a beauty to it. The repetition of the grandfather clock was somewhat unneeded, IMO. You need to punctuate it more (that is my ...

Seeing that Fand has already been here... I'll have to come up with something good to say. This poem was kind of...cliché? Yes. The story is a drab one, haven't ...

Wow. I'm going to say [and you'll be amazed with this] I actually understood something you wrote! ^_^ I really liked this, but I felt it was missing something. And ...

I second everything that Fräulein WD said. I can't really say more, other than tell you how you can fix it. That's always helpful, ja? So, you have this emotional ...

Get them in a fight? Doesn't exactly isolate them, but it gets them together, which is a start. Lock them in a room. But not literally, but figuratively.

Weakness is, by definition, an absence of strength. Yes? - Clive It's a personality defect, wouldn't you say? Who wants to be weak; it's viewed in the wrong light. - ...

hah, well, Oscar Wilde was a playwright, an author, and a poet, so...

Sorry this took me so long to get to, I slightly forgot >_< We have only minutes till class starts Till isn't the word, you mean until, or 'til. I ...

Oscar Wilde!

with the T.V. turned on to some rude, crude programming. Rude and Crude being about the same thing, and rhyming, I suggest you cut one or the other. You bog ...

I think it's a good one, the image works nice. I don't know if imp spoke of it (I read above, a little bit) But the ( and ) being ...

One: read over your work before you post it please . Check for typos and spelling errors, so we don't have to. Two: Till isn't the word you mean to ...

I didn't like it. Of course, it wasn't a bad poem. You rhymed, you punctuated, I love it. But it just didn't seem like a good poem to me. Why? ...