Emerson

Some grammar issues in spots, but just glancing I think others caught them...? I wasn’t gay, but if I was it wouldn’t matter, she was beautiful enough to make me ...

"Yeah, really, what the fuck is he doing?" Abby asked, half of her wanting to sit up and see what the guy was doing, and the other half wanting to ...

Oy, it's odd isn't it? Guys are so much easier for us to write!!! I love Lieutenant...Come on, it's easy to write? Girl pretending to be a guy xD I'd ...

I really liked the last line. This part was OK, for some reason it didn't seem as good to me as the others. It was bumpy to read, which I ...

So adorable... Snakes are awesome =]

Abby sat in the car ignoring everyone else around her. She couldn't believe they had been speeding on the road, got pulled over by a cop, shot at the cup, ...

When I'm nervous, I play with my sleeves. I think I have to keep my hands busy? - Clive I had a lot...They went away. I still have a lot. ...

This is good, but I think it should be done differently. It would be much better if written about the event after school, and if you showed his pain, and ...

If only I could speak your wonderful Italiano, IMP.

There were a lot of grammar, spelling, typo issues in this, but I'm not going to point them out. You did a lot of telling, lots and lots and lots. ...

How do we save kittens...? I was under the impression I was eating them. and SPEW=Awesome. That's what SPEW is.

hoot the innocent bystanders innocently standing-by. That sounds so funny.. I chorckled. haha.

Brother

Again, Bechka? You must enjoy that, hm? I'm actually reading two things A Farewell to Arms by Hemingway, which I'm enjoying, but would enjoy more if I didn't have to ...

10/10 ^_^