Emerson

Er, calling him the master isn't too cliché. Or at least, she can continue to do so, imo. I mean, vampire-wise, it is cliché. But also vampire-wise, in almost everything ...

Hello there! I'm here finally :wink: Prologue She hadn't eaten for three days, the longest time yet , and she didn't think she could last any longer. That part just ...

this was very list like, and navel gazing. I couldn't feel anything. It's just young poetry about depression, the emotions don't even make sense once on paper. I think I ...

Je suis ici critiquer ton fiction! tu aimes, oui? ^_~ I don't know what anyone else said, so if I repeat, can you ever forgive me? "No comma thanks,” I ...

Beinvenue, girl who isn't B What might I call you then? Or on another note, what do you write? If you need help around the site or find yourself getting ...

It had a cute rhyme to it. The repetitious didn't really help it, though it didn't hinder it either. It's a grocery list though, so I can't get anything out ...

=P I should search things more. Maybe it is just that it isn't punctuated, but if I expand the line: Technicians hazmat suit-clad Technicians hazardous material suit-clad, etcetera It still ...

I moved this to "other poetry" because it is in verse. So I'll also critique it like a poem. Navel gazing, boring, didn't express any emotion. Try writing about something ...

Ah, you asked me to come back and take a look, didn't you? It seems exactly the same as before although it reads smoother - and was it punctuated before? ...

It just freaks out when activity is high, since it is a server issue, so it will go on and off and you have to learn how to survive. I'm ...

I liked it! The only thing I have to nit pick on [I don't know if snoink said it?] is the spacing in between each lines and the last line. ...

I think it was neat ^_^ I do request more punctuation though! And I could just look hazmat up in the dictionary except I am lazy and also mozilla spell ...

*shakes head* That is horrible. It's sad to hear they were shot in the first place, even her children too who were so young into life. But at least no ...

I got a new dress, and standing in front of my mirror makes me look shorter than I really am Oo

UPDATE 7/18/07 I'm stealing Dreamy's form of posting in these things ;-) It looked so beautiful, I cannot help myself. ► Módlmy Się - I pulled it from submission in ...