Emerson

Thanks all ^_^ Too bad I can't just have a YWS party in real life? Might have made the celebration slightly brighter ^_~

I'm very confused.. JC hit the nail on the head; this isn't fiction. Should I move it? I don't know your intention. There just isn't enough to this to make ...

Locked for Plagiarism...

Thanks ed ;-) locked . Plagiarism isn't accepted here.

moved to poetry section

Hm. Sid> Read a bit of the beginning of East of Eden . Steinbeck did awesome of describing a town without boring people. The problem with infodumps is nothing is ...

Hm. It was overly simplistic for me, and I couldn't feel anything from it. It didn't take use of imagery either. I think I've read too many poems about the ...

Yoi. Well, first off your sentences were overly simple, as was the rhyme scheme. Both those facts smothered it thoroughly. Next off, you navel gazed to the max, which means ...

Oh. It was beautiful ^_^ Quite frankly: I'm not entirely sure what it is about. In the third stanza, I understood more. But I still don't understand it much. I'll ...

This was kind of cute, I suppose. Really the only thing I can comment on [plus, tonight all my critiques seem overly useless, sorry!] is that this is very prose ...

Dunno what dear Fandy-Dandy said, but listen to her. The problem with these is that I can't get into them and I can't feel. Try using more imagery and sensory ...

Hum. I'm not sure what to say. I guess it interested me, but only with the fact that I guessed what was happening, because I didn't get it, and my ...

Hm. You could be using the wrong URL? I noticed with Photobucket they had a new UrL which gave you a link to the gallery, and I often times mistook ...

Oh my... Do I critique this, or clap? The first poem ever written for me, yay! Some parts I can pick up on--like the fact that I have a chick ...

huh. Well seeing that all of my favorite poetry critics have already hit this, I probably won't say a lot they haven't. Punctuation, please. Poetry & Punctuation Also, this article ...