Emerson

Eh. I'm not entirely sure I'll continue reading this. Sure, it may pick up in a few pieces and you'll probably drive me up a wall until I read it, ...

Finished House of Leaves . Made me feel claustrophobic and agoraphobic at times ^^' charming, though. Still not touching East of Eden . Instead, I just started The Idiot by ...

Bonjour SOPF, Is that an acronym for something? Is there something easier on the ears that I can call you? [Sopf doesn't have much phonetic value to it :lol:] I'm ...

Huh. I'm not sure how to critique this as a poem. It didn't have much of a poetic format to it, and it kind of seemed like a stream of ...

As everyone who knows me can agree, I rant. Even when speaking aloud, I easily get off of topic and rant. Rant is just a term for it, it's more ...

Oh, I think of The Sorcerer's Stone at first, although I don't read HP, and you've misspelled sorcerer. Sounds like some fantasy heir. Someone realizes their an heir to something, ...

You still have the same typos in the beginning: My father was not supposed to cry, you can 't be mad at somebody who’s crying. You can ' t hate ...

Everything said above is all good. This reminds me of something I might get in a chain letter, or something, you know? It's cute, it rhymes, it doesn't have too ...

I'm glad Colly was here to catch all of that, because I didn't feel like it XD But she's completely right, the rhythm and rhyming fell apart in a few ...

The one [s]who's[/s] who'd hold me close. I liked the rhyme scheme, but I think that s3 was clunky, like Lu Marielle, it's the last line. The problem with this ...

First of all, stop abusing punctuation! It is an important part of all poetry. Poetry & Punctuation . In the second poem, "mere human who" sounded very odd, and use ...

I can't think up what good things to say. Perhaps the idea was too abstract, or maybe the way it was told was clunky, or maybe it is just too ...

Someone might have said this already... oh well. Give them goals. That sounds so much more like a way to create a plot, but sometimes goals also shape characters. Of ...

Hmm....I think it shows promise. You're trying for something beautiful, I can read it in how you try to word things. But, Rieda hit the nail on the head when ...

Some photos from the adventures, little to no edits other than cropping, on a few. More tomorrow...