Emerson

Fand and Brad Harsh critiquers XD that is a very odd match up. Dream_Deep and Bjorn :P I wonder if Dreamy will see this....*hides*

This is awesome ^_^ as eighteen people got seventeen lifejackets I hate when people use the word "got" for "have" The waves pull ed higher, barely shot back by the ...

This was overly simplistic, in my mind. The syllables were really short, the rhymes were real plain. It's just too simple and "easy" of a poem. The story behind it ...

Claudette wrote: They aren't really... artistic photographs. IMO. They're just pictures of stuff. Says the Girl who took a picture of a pile of books. *pokes Clau* Smile I was ...

You said, "My true love," way too much. I think it was just navel gazing, I couldn't really get into it or feel anything. it was written to your "true ...

I tend to use dialog to give past hints. or use a physical feature, or some characteristic to first hint at it, and then explain it. I don't know... I'm ...

Exposition 1.a large-scale public exhibition or show, as of art or manufactured products: an exposition of 19th-century paintings; an automobile exposition. 2.the act of expounding, setting forth, or

They aren't really... artistic photographs. IMO. They're just pictures of stuff.

When you're bored. [maybe] Keep it up for as long as you can, but don't kill yourself. Sometimes it's just not the story to be written, and it won't work. ...

Love, an energy that cannot be broken, but dispersed -- shattered, like splintered light; shards that rustle like the intake of breath in absolute silence. I don't really like this ...

I suppose I should have gotten upset and teary eyes when Kyle was found dead, but I didn't. and then when he was ok, I didn't really care. Perhaps it ...

Emotional poems are always difficult. This is navel gazing. Some of your sentences are fragments, or they aren't properly punctuated. You don't need all the spaces between each lines. This ...

WHAT MAKES A GOOD CRITIQUE? A critique in its basic form is a combination of several things: compliments, complaints, whys, and how to fix it. Although, this can be debated, ...

EXAMPLE Then turning to my love I said "The dead are dancing with the dead The dust is whirling with the dust" But she - she heard the violin And ...

WHAT DO WE BEGIN WITH? Seeing as a large percentage of us are teenagers, we tend to like to write about our emotions. We’re all on hormonal highs, who doesn’t ...