Emerson

I agree with everyone else to the largest extent ^_~ When writing a poem with emotions in it you need to keep your reader in mind. You're writing directly to ...

For one, you don't need those line breaks in between unless it is for a stanza (one line a stanza does not make ;-)) Also, I read this quote in ...

I did like this--it had more emotion than most poems I see. But I also had some issues with it. "hurt", "kill", "ache" they're all very general, vague words--and word ...

I really, really loved the imagery and the rhyme scheme in this. It was beautiful, imo. I could see the rose on the water, and everything =] But I still ...

It's good. But I want more imagery. >_> Maybe I just can't see/feel the imagery you're already giving us. Rain is used a lot in fiction (to the point of ...

Everyone else has said lots of good things. ^_~ One thing I liked about this is you personified your misery, but I think I would have liked it if you ...

Guten Tag! Heh, I don't know much German. I know a few words. I'm hoping to improve. Anyhow, welcome to YWS. If you have any questions about the site or ...

How many words is POD so far? Word count means more than pages ^_~ I'm excited for you to finish! Keep in mind: when you edit, you end up cutting ...

Jack does! So he can, er, come back to the USA!

We're trying to raise money so Jack can come back to the USA. Who would like to give donations? Even if everyone just donated $1 it would help out a ...

That is amazing.... hahahah. I love you.

I'm non denomination Christian, probably. I don't believe in what great religion and that only that one will get you to heaven. I believe that almost all religions (I don't ...

Bienvenue! YWS is a great place ^_^ If you have any questions about the site or need help finding your way around, or anything feel free to contact me. I ...

The site was down this morning, I'm not sure of the time it went down. It just now (10.20 E) came back up. [Date is August 19th] Although, it was ...

I get random lines in my head, and continue them. Or maybe I have a general idea/thought that I want to express. They come to me...never. Hah, my poetry only ...