Emerson

If only the guys that wanted you weren't imaginary. I don't like the shift of tense in this sentence. The rest of the story is first person, but this is ...

For example, pandas the illness. being that PANDAS is an acronym, you should write it like: PANDAS. And, I know it causes OCD (I had a friend who got OCD ...

Amen!

I like this! How is this bad? I did like this a whole lot, the fact that it had no punctuation or capitalization really worked for this. Although, I didn't ...

There isn't a whole lot to this...Apeva is right! Although, I would have hoped not to be as blunt as she was. There isn't anything about this that really stands ...

You have some typos in here that easily be fixed. Also the format can be changed--you don't need all the spaces between the lines. Oh, and punctuation is your friend! ...

Yes, I don't like these simple poems. I was really hoping it would go morbid and it wouldn't be her friends. XD In some places, you have commas where you ...

It's cute, and childish, and simple--but that's it. ^_^ It isn't bad, but I like deeper poems. Poems about jump roping children? Yes, I like deeper poems.

The ending surprised me--and for that, I really like this. I was thinking "well this is dull, it's just about snow... oh, wow!" It certainly got better. Although, something about ...

I liked this! It was good, but the last two stanzas didn't work for me. The repetition of being fattening by lies ("gorging on the lies until I'm fit to ...

To know this is written about a cat seems sweet, but the poem seems more than that. It's real simple, but I kind of like it for that... Like Jasmine ...

From what I can tell, you only changed the punctuation and a couple of lines. Even so, this version flows so much better. It's beautiful. ^_^ This edited version it ...

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I'm working on two novels. One I'm actually writing, one I am planning. The one I am writing is called Avoir L'espoir . It's a slight romance novel (Though cynical ...

hmmm... Of course, they've never defined this section very strictly, but I think this would something that would go in a blog, not in the Non-fiction section. Consider creating a ...