Emerson

First, I'm going to move this to the fiction section, because that is where writing goes. ^^ As to the critique, this is really too short for us to give ...

Welcome to the site! If you have questions or need help finding your way around or something (and you sound like you might?) feel free to PM me and I'll ...

This is awesome =] but hard to listen to, it's too quiet.... Ice burgs XD

Bagels are awesome =]

UPDATE: A REJECTION LETTER I received a rejection letter! Not the one I had been waiting for, but one I, rather, forgot existed. At the least, they rejected me? I ...

hmmm I think the longer lines in S2 (L6 and L8) should be broken up--it's just odd to read short lines, than long lines. I think "Dr" in the last ...

Ah, good question! A lot of this has to do with character development, which YWS even has a user group for! You should go check that out, it will help ...

This was OK. I don't like it because I feel like it's a real cheat off of The Raven with "[for] evermore" and "nevermore". You'll really want to change those ...

Hey Nina! Welcome to YWS. I'm going to move this to the welcome forum because this fits better there, 'kay? If you have any questions about the site or need ...

The penmanship of other languages is kind of fancy. the use of "kind of" makes this a really weak sentence. As an essay, this is OK. You seem to just ...

er, probably with out the article? I dunno. I know how much I love articles! So, I'll probably put the article in. Yes, Sam thought of toads too XD

For a poem with such a strong meaning behind it, this could potentially be something that makes the reader burst into tears. It's a great idea, but just needs to ...

The largest problem I have is the lack of poetry. It's an interesting concept, but it needs more. On my first read, I didn't understand the idea behind it, and ...

Same smells still linger here, do you mean smell, as in the singular? If you want it plural, your tense is all off... This poem was... a little bit below ...

Hehe, you pull of navel gazing in a superb way, Sureal. I loved the allusion to Genesis, and the way the self centeredness was really a hiding place, almost. Or ...