Emerson

There were some things that really bothered me about this poem. For one, you have a lot of slang dialect in it, like jus' and an, which was kind of ...

I'm not really sure what to say about it? This might end up being really short. I was kind of curious why the moon was out in the day time--assuming ...

I liked this. :) Because of that I'm going to nit-pick. He looked across the table, With confusion and with woe. His blue eyes dull like iron, Like the sun ...

Dreamy> You'll want to google the thing-y and try to find more info on it (I'll do some hunting if I have time. ^_~) before going one way or the ...

woo! Hee hee, the drop looks funny. From the down time, I suppose?

Hah, here is your critique: critique.wav - 11.28MB Just a note, at one part it kind of cut out? I say "Seventh stanza". I say um a lot, and sound ...

Welcome to the site, Ryan! Just so you know, you can put your poetry in the poetry section ^.~ It probably won't get many critiques here! If you have any ...

I'm not so sure I like it as much as Gadi... It could have potential, but as it is, it's hard for me to feel anything from it. There is ...

I like the metaphor you used, because sometimes I can feel like this! Over all it was pretty neat, but there are some things you could fix up. To a ...

I really can't do anything beyond echo Bubbles and offer some tips. We can't tell what this poem is about, and because of that, I can't feel anything with it. ...

Well, I've been surfing around the NaNoWriMo forums, and everyone always has really cool things in their signatures, like banner's for their novels? I made one of my upcoming NaNoWriMo: ...

*squee* NaNo!

I love how it's almost a humorous titles it's so "The ___ of ____" but in a witty way. I'd probably pick it up just to figure out what it ...

Hey! Welcome to the site ^_~ Heather is great. :) If you have any questions about the site or need some help with something, feel free to PM me. :D ...

Nope! But, I've done things like that before XD Although, I've never broken anything. On one keyboard (the keyboard I love! It's clear, and see through, and has a blue ...