Emerson

errr... *moved to randomness*

S3 was my favorite. That stanza was superb, I loved it. The others? I'm not so sure. I'm trying to understand your full meaning, and I'm not getting it. After ...

:O it's linds! You look pretty. ^^ and older than thirteen? heheh.

If you want it deleted, PM a moderator. (Like me!) As to the critique, it's a very good idea for the poem but it was poorly worked out. They sad ...

No arms to embrace me nor a shoulder to cry on. Tears keep falling ceaselessly and unnoticed by all I think this is your weakest stanza. Rather than telling us ...

I liked it, but I don't think it should be a poem. This was like a story in a verse, really. It had no poetic qualities beyond rhyming, and I'm ...

hahahahah. Yes. PUNCTUATION IS LOVE! Anyhow. The idea is cliché, or the ending is. In some places I liked it: she is merely an arms length away but she is ...

The whirling ghosts I think here, you should use a word besides ghost. Maybe spirits, or entity? I liked this poem, but I think you should add a bit more ...

My thirst has bled my dry—but at last— do you mean "me" instead of my? The third stanza seems strange to me, I don't see how "this mess" fits in, ...

Ah, Welcome ^^ Sadly, Imp can speak more Russian than I could ever pretend to speak, so I'm left with: Bonjour et ça va? heh. Hope you enjoy your time ...

Er, here is another link to it: :D

Kay> Yay for NaNo names! I could make you one. ^_^ I used Paint Shop Pro XI and Animation Shop (8? I think. No clue.) It looks hard, but I ...

I don't have physics [yet] and therefor: I don't like adjectives!

This isn't really a literature piece. :) *moved*

Better. :D I half liked this, and half didn't. Not your fault; I'm not a person for nature poems. I like meanings and things, not the sadness of trees. ^_~ ...