Emerson

Stars and galaxies form from its wrath Forming a celestial tapestry The reuse of the verb "to form" didn't work so well here. Just as a grammar Nazi note: use ...

Did any one else notice how COOL everything looks now? The front page makes me happy... I love the reflection thing. hahaha. *high fives Nate* You always randomly find ways ...

I think this has a lot of possibility, but a lot of space in between where it is and where it can be. I'm not even entirely sure what you ...

Hmm... I haven't to second Pros, though his first sentence seems terribly dramatic? heh. The issue with this is: what makes it a poem and not a story in a ...

This is a really cute poem. :) By the end, it was cheery. I think your flow from line to line was a little iffy, it just didn't flow nicely. ...

The real downfall of this poem is that the rhyming is so...bland. It really kills the poem. Rhyming is a good thing for poetry, but sometimes it can be over ...

It hasn’t snow for many years… this line doesn't make sense, your tenses are off. "It hasn't snow ed for many years..." is better. This is too depressing... But I ...

Bonne Anniversaire mon amie! I hope you had a lovely day, full of fencing and all else that brings our IMP cheer. No, that Russian version of The Brothers never ...

This seemed to fall into the oddest of ways. What does your lab have to do with the rest of the poem? I suppose I don't understand the meaning behind ...

I think the metaphor is a beautiful one, but it could be better expressed. After a while, your lines lose their potency. "Cold" is something very good for sensory image, ...

Uh, it was Ok? Your meaning was almost too obviously told, you know? Your last stanza made this too clear. It has no deeper meaning to it beyond that, and ...

I really, really loved some of the metaphors use used, they flowed beautifully, but in some places they were kind of cluttered: Dark air from [s]teh[/s] the smoldering [s]citgarettes[/s] cigarettes ...

What I've found, is that I force her into talking to me about The Chair , ask her what she is struggling with, then hurl helpful tips and rambles at ...

Bah. Dang it. I must, er, get more active. and. Stuff.

Hello! I made your line smaller, alright? Try not to use really long lines because they freak out the front page and then Nate [s]wants to butcher us[/s] gives us ...