Emerson

Yeah, this isn't poetry. So I'm going to move it to other fiction. Also, it's much too short of a story for us to actually give a good critique on. ...

I have to agree, these seems like lyrics. For me, they were too bland an unoriginal. I can't exactly tell what you are talking about, I can only guess. Worse ...

Moved to writing activities . :D

I actually wrote this out and scanned it. :D

You will want to put more up, this isn't really enough for people to critique. Somewhere between 500 words and 2,000 words is a good length, but one paragraph isn't ...

Don't forget to capitalize the pronoun I. :D The only thing this poem makes me think is: why is she afraid? If you could explain to us, or better yet, ...

Don't forget to capitalize the pronoun I. Honestly? I didn't like it. There isn't any imagery to it, and I don't feel anything. It doesn't really make sense, and I ...

This was a bit too redundant. you kept repeating some lines. Also, you don't have any punctuation really, and the subject of the poem is kind of abstract. Your probably ...

I can only echo trident, because he said it better than I could have.

I think it's interesting that you purpose it is a friend who killed you, and that they'll only do it again. It's alright. It's a lot of telling, though, which ...

Like your last poem I critiqued, this just doesn't have a lot in it. You've been posting a lot of poetry, real fast. I would suggest you slow down, and ...

This is my first chapter in a co-written story with another user on YWS. Just a note, you should probably mention who the other author is so you give them ...

hah, don't love me, love google!

The submission page looks really nice, "What would you like to submit today?" I think this will help the confusion with how to get around the site. I know when ...

First, as you'll notice, not a lot of people post poetry with polls, especially if the polls have nothing to do with the poem. Even still, adding a poll to ...