Emerson

I tend to like to have my conflict as soon as possible. That doesn't always happen. Also, doing that can throw the reader into the story, but it can also ...

Wow, Tess, you are so beautiful.... LAF, You look awesome. XD Backgroundbob: Isn't Nevada great? >< I used to live there.

As Grif led her through the ship, she noticed her palms were sweatier than usual. She hated meeting new people. Not to mention, the ship looked nothing like what a ...

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You have a character named Rammstein? I think I love you.. Well, I've never had to cut characters out entirely, I tend to work 'round them. You can always change ...

XD That is like the ultimate mind trick! Thats great... so every time you try to get onto messenger, you're forst to go "ahhhh my novel!" hee hee.

The last two lines didn't do as much for me as the rest of the poem. Everything is so good and powerful, but then that plea seems weak in comparison ...

No one watches as your life flutters by but the murderer, Who grants you no time before he brings down his dagger into my side, Your tense change here (from ...

I liked it! The only thing I could suggest you do is make it stronger. Make your words and imagery more vivid, express the cold and heat in ways that ...

It's... cute. But it isn't really poetry. This might be lyrics, but poetry [to me, and to others I am sure] has more behind it than words. It has a ...

Hmmm. Honestly, I'm not sure what I think. But I'll try to make sense of it for you. ^^; The emotions weren't described well enough. You had good metaphors, but ...

Wow. I really wish I could be of more help but all I can think to say is, "Wow". Though, I do think I might know of something you could ...

It was very good, and the only thing I can really say is to add the proper punctuation, and to possibly pull the idea more tightly together. It is good, ...

Eh. I suppose I don't like it because it is a political poem. Not to mention, you've already blocked out any republican readers out there. Everyone understands that Hussein was ...

I think this is a very good poem! The only thing I could suggest is to go through and try to make your words stronger. For explain "pain" is an ...