Emerson

Please do not argue with people who are giving critiques. If they are giving up their time to help you improve your writing, you should appreciate them, not yell at ...

Just so you know, cinquains have such a bizarre style that they usually don't make good poetry. This is no exception... sorry.

I liked this a lot... but I think you let it drag on far to long. My suggestion is end it at S4. The last line in that is really, ...

Like snoink said, the line breaks are a little wild. I actually think this would be really good if you fixed the line breaks, got rid of the repetition (I ...

Some of it doesn't make sense, and that is a really big problem. Also, punctuation is your friend! Otherwise... I'm not sure what to say.

This is really good, pengu... The only thing I didn't like was the last line. I think you shoudl contain it to its style, and perhaps let I am human ...

Because even if you are drowning in joy, You are still drowning. This was the best part of the whole poem. If I was allowed, I would steal it and ...

Colly has stolen the words from my mouth... Or perhaps I just don't like depressing poetry? I take that back! The Garden of Love by William Blake I went to ...

I like it! I'm glad it was published! It is very simple; there is nothing under its skin. But I don't think it needs to be any better than that. ...

but i know different i have a heart and it hurts because what else but a heart could cause such pain? This was really the best part of your poem. ...

Hehe, thanks insomniac for suggesting me ^_~ And then, here I am..? All I really have to say is this: some things are poetry, some things are blog posts hiding ...

Welcome to YWS! I like your use of é to add syllables, haha. The AABA CCDC was good as well, although I suggest you try to clean the syllables up ...

I've tried to publish a short story a few times. I was rejected twice, and finally accepted by the YWLJ ^_^. (The lit journal for YWS.) I also have another ...

I like it. ^_^ I'm not... sure how to help it out, actually. It isn't bad but it isn't a "Wow, amazing!" poem either, so I can only give you ...

I've read lot of poems about life and death... so the idea is used up. ^_^ but that is okay! One things the poems I have read have that make ...