Emerson

That sounds rather odd. How do you mean it goes into another scene? Well then you have one of three choices: A) write out the scene B) tell the scene ...

This was incredebly funny, and for that, you get my points. :) Since it is set up as a news article, I can't complain about it much. It's a humorous ...

I have to say it, but I know you are a better member than that. Be sure your "I"s are capitalized, and that you have apostrophes in your contractions. Lazy ...

If you can, I would just suggest rewriting the whole thing. It is one big huge info dump, which is nasty. Why not write the whole scene out rather than ...

I was really into Anne Rice when I was in eighth and ninth grade. I still like her, I just prefer to read other things. I still really enjoy her ...

I don't know what part one of Chapter one was, but this is nowhere near long enough to be a piece of fiction. You should consider posting more, something around ...

Tonight the lights are dimmed; The halls fall on deaf ears. [This makes figurative sense, I think, but it's kind of weird. Perhaps I'm too literal] Each doorway an entrance ...

Welcome to YWS ^_^ What kinds of things do you like to write? If you have any questions or need help finding your way around (the site can be confusing...) ...

The Midnight Disease: The Drive to Writer, Writers Block, and the Creative Brain by Alice W. Flaherty was a joy to read. Maybe I'm just a big language nerd, but ...

I got pretty drunk, on Budweiser. Damn American beer Razz But it was all my friend had! Haha, support the company! (my father works for them, as you might remember? ...

1. Read more books than I did this past year (35). (Jack, I keep a live journal/blog for my books, you should get an lj!) 2. Finish my rough draft ...

Arthur Miller's Death of a Salesman and Edward Albee's The Sandbox both demonstrate, through the use of nonrealism and absurdity, the idea that steadfastly following the institutionalized conventions

It wouldn't destroy its self... I think you would still have older members who understand and respect the system posting. And even if no one ever posted a single story ...

Oh my gosh, this is amazing. I really have no complaints what so ever; when I'm working on Death Machine , can you send me some magical editing dust? For ...

if the new members read the rules (which should be the first thing one does -before- joining a site), then they'll know why they can't post. Haha, if they did ...