Emerson

For Tillychan, and her sandwich. .... XD You're horrible. Don't let your mommy find out you used such a bad word. who had blonde hair and freckles a nasty habit ...

Character transitions are easiest when you have something breaking up the narration--a chapter break, a page break--something the reader will really notice. If there is a break in the text, ...

I tend to never write curse words into my narration, because it usually bothers the heck out of me. I do curse a bit more in real life than I ...

Jack! I love you for writing. The dark clouds had appeared two days ago, brooding and angry, casting the sea in gloom. Aren't storms always brooding and angry? Only today ...

but in the strange way his life usually turned out, what was worst was exactly what happened. I think I understand this--I'm not sure. But it is strange, and you ...

It was her sixteenth birth day the day she placed I think you see my problem. Please reword. She kissed his cheek as she ought and laid on her side ...

oh, Well then I'll have to shut the lights off. ^_^

This is my entry, or half of it, for Cal's contest . It's short narratives on my secondary characters in The Party Killers , so if it makes no sense ...

it is good that the couple live away from the outskirts of Boston This is weird. If you say they live away from the outskirts of Boston, I think you ...

This isn't a bad poem, but I'll go over some spots where I think things could be changed for the better. It started off as nothing. That innocent glance across ...

Yes, but, if it's legalized, then the drug abusing will increase by a lot. Do I need to just requote what I said above? If pot is legalized it would ...

That must be one thing that amazing me the post about you, Grif. Haha. Congrats, or what does one say?

It was a morbid day Millie thought. With an opaque, slate sky overhead filled with darker glints of cloud. The second sentence isn't much of a sentence, considering it contains ...

But pot affects other people. One sniff of the smoke and someone is hooked. Most people don't want to be around that. And it ruins peoples relationships and family. Cigarettes ...

In a perfect world, there would be no nicotine, alchohol, marajuana, or any other drug that serves no real purpose In a perfect would, there would be free drugs everywhere!! ...