EmeraldcityWriter

I thought that this was good, it's a good start and the last paragraph is really good. However you might want to consider switching it to third-person, you didn't really ...

I thought this was pretty good. It seems like you have a good plot going. I think you should put more of how the people are feeling the confidence of ...

This is a good storyline, it really caught my interest. I really like how you've created the character of 27 but I think she is a little extreme. I'm guessing ...