EmeraldcityWriter

this looks like a great storyline, i hope you continue on with it

this is a good storyline but it moves fast. if you took some time to build up the suspense and describe what your character is feeling and doing in the ...

I need some feedback on this beginning so I can decide whether or not to continue with this story. Enjoy reading and please review. Insanity that’s what this was. Pure ...

I thought that this was good, it's a good start and the last paragraph is really good. However you might want to consider switching it to third-person, you didn't really ...

I thought this was pretty good. It seems like you have a good plot going. I think you should put more of how the people are feeling the confidence of ...

I know it's been a long time but I've finally edited it and I'm almost done with the first chapter and it should be up soon. They came in the ...

This is a good storyline, it really caught my interest. I really like how you've created the character of 27 but I think she is a little extreme. I'm guessing ...

This is the start to a story I'm thinking of continuing. Feedback needed. They came in the night. They always came in the night. They could not risk upsetting the ...

The emergency vehicles were set up farther away then I originally realized so it took nearly ten minutes to get to the intersection where they had all stopped. Upon reaching ...

This is a new storyline I"m working on. Ideas and comments welcomed. The sky was gray. That wouldn't have been odd had it actually been cloudy. But it had been ...

This is part of the first chapter to a possible storyline I'm working on. Comments and suggestions welcomed! It was very dark and uncomfortable here. Wherever "here" was. I really ...