Emer

One thing, first of all: please please PLEASE do not follow 1dering at star's advice on where to break your lines. That's the worst thing you could do to this ...

As Matt so eloquently pointed out, it may be a "wee bit cliche," but your skill with imagery and the original word choices quite often make up for it. "If ...

Yes, I am alive and kicking! And I promise I'll post in GC soon. =) But for now, onto your lovely poem, yes? ^^ Tonight the lights are dimmed; The ...

I'd say Via's covered about all of it; I like it, but I think it could benefit from a good shot of punctuation. It does sound an awful lot like ...

It's not bad, but in all honesty, there's very little flow--and flow is what gives poetry most of its aesthetic appeal. The fact that every line ends in a period ...