Elocina

Yes, I did. Here's more, about 3 pages long. I thought that I wouldn't want to post more than that at a time. Thanks to everyone who has waited this ...

Thank you, and, no, I'm not a large profanity fan, either. That's why the "bad" guy is using it, and not my main character. we've all met those obnoxious people ...

Yes, very cute and fun to read...and short! Sometimes the shorter, the better. Highly comical, and i agree with what the others are saying... the reviews are fun to read ...

The first three stanzas held the most feeling to me, and those are the ones I would remember. I liked the way you ended the first three the same, then ...

Yeah, the action isn't highly intense. It isn't meant to be. This is one of Ember's fast take-downs, meant to rattle Murkoon. I didn't like That particular quote, either. I ...

lol. better git it done then. SOME of us r waiting.....waitng...waiting...waiting....whose seen "Finding Nemo"? To quote Dori, "Just keep waiting-just keep waiting, waiting..." Ok, more modify her quo

Ok, that was....interesting. Then again, my brianstorms are quite similar when it comes to how much sense it makes to others. I take it you weren't expecting critiques?

It was....unusual. Not quite 'strange', but different. You take the roll as a sort of narrator instead of a character. I got a little lost on the last 2 paragraphs. ...

YAY! Celebration party at CMI!!!! Fire broke his habit of improperly using 'too' (I think he now does that just to annoy me; an interesting by-product of a typo, I ...

Here's Chapter 3. Any and all comments are greatly appreciated. Haven't revised it yet. To quoteth the Great Fire, "Fresh from the oven and full of holes probably". I thank ...

I liked them. Didn't realize how many words you use s instead of z in. Interesting how the plot unfolds and deepens....wish I hadn't read iced.cappicino's post: Made me think ...

*sighs irrately* FIIIIIRE! What is it with you and confusing your 'to's? One more time....sigh. (not really mad. Just starting to wonder why you like so many blasted 'O's.) “I’m ...

Interesting and appealing. It has some intriguing images, but I feel like there sould be some background...I wish I knew how to critique poetry better. Nice.

I edited the mistakes pointed out to me, and added some things in. I hope that is what you had generally in mind. Thanks.

I updated some things. Still more to come, Owen's fight with the creature.