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Re: Heart-shaped Box
I 5really like the repetitiveness and sybolism in this poem... how the heart-shaped box stands for love and for youth. Its really good! Just be careful with punctuation, and like ...
Apr 4, 2009 -
Re: Never Giving Up
Down in the belly of this dark abyss, The darkness engulfs me It threatens to choke me The light is just a tiny dot, so far away; yet I have ...
Apr 4, 2009 -
Re: True Heir, Chapter 2
I think this story has lots of potential, and you are good at creating characters. Just be careful with grammer! A few grammer mistakes i noticed... 'I sighed, Rose was ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: What of Material things?
LOVE THIS POEM! I love the message, I love your word choice, i love the rhythm it has. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK! What of material things? Do they let ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Sweet revenge (working title!) part 1
His cold hands grasped my shoulders and shoved me onto the rough brick wall. I felt the back of my dress, the beautiful dress I had worked so hard to ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Scared
I think this poem is reall good... just a few quick grammer-type things... In the second stanza, isn't "heart break" one word (heartbreak?) For the ending (Which i absolutely love!) ...
Mar 29, 2009 -
Re: Why I'm considered a psycho... (Chapter one)
You have really good writing style... not to complicated (like you're trying to hard) or to simple. keep it up! Your story is really enjoyable...can't wait to read more!
Mar 29, 2009