Elinor

Hi Sea! This has a fresh concept and lovely imagery, but it just didn't seem like a poem at all. If you take out the stanzas, you've got a basic ...

Err... Three things. First, have you ever read or seen poetry? They have to be divided into stanzas and lines. Maybe the lines might be whole sentences or bits of ...

April 14th - Colors Colors! So many colors! There's pink and bright orange, and Red and blue-green Many shades and hues, like gold and ice-blue. So many colors that color ...

Hey there! For your first poem, I will say that this was rather good. You creating a compelling, memorable story! There were a few things that bothered me, like your ...

5/10 Cool, but a little too flashy and hard to focus on.

Hey there! I'll say I have to agree with Jagged here; you take an interesting idea with a lot of potential and then sell it short. I had just a ...

??? This moved along incredibly fast and now I'm lost. First we're off towards training and now we're in all out battle? Can someone help so I can get back ...

:cry: Oh, Sammi! I had no idea things were so bad. *hugs* I thought this letter was well-written. I could really feel the emotion that it took to write this, ...

April 13th - The Serene Garden It shines in the moonlit; overgrown vines lacing old white terrace; pastel colored flowers dotting a field of blue-green. A couple comes here to ...

Hi Fizza! This was okay, but your beginning needs a lot of work. It's a little too vague, and it just consists of sentence after sentence of actions that lack ...

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Bailey, I will say that you've got a decent start. Your idea for this fresh and original, and I can tell you put a lot of effort into this- the ...

April 12 - Orange A fruit and a color, It tints the fire and sun. Mixes with blacks and pinks, It shows us sun-kissed summer.

Hey Mystical! Black- My problem lies just with the eyes, but I circled the whole face so you could see how they look in proportion with everything else. The eyes ...

This was...all over the place. Even the idea of it is cliche. You don't develop your characters enough; they're cardboard cutouts who I don't care about in the slightest. Right ...