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Re: Zoraster Immolates Himself On A Rising Star Near The Equator
Hi Gal. I'm not exactly sure to critique this poem. It's certainly different, and the rhymes make it cute. Would it be a limerick, by any chance? Either way, I ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Raindrops
Done!
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Love, Demise and Last Goodbyes ~ Her
Hi Lala! So, there were a few things I liked and a few things I didn't like about the story. It's a definite improvement over your first part! The issues ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Her Last Drink Is Coffee; one
Hi Hannah! So, like Navita and Snoink, I found this really confusing. I think you've got a promising start with good characters, but it goes by way too quickly and ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: FREAK
Hi Karina! My goodness, I think I'm in love with this story. It's so unbelievably compelling, and the edits made it ten times better; I liked how you were able ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Slipped
Hi! Thanks for critiquing my story! I thought I'd return the favor and critique yours. I understand that this is old, but if you want to improve this, there are ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: The Three Crowns - Prologue
Hi! Okay, so you have a lot happening in this prologue! We're introduced to a creepy old theater and we learn a terrifying secret about it. However, you may have ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: The Knight's Secret (2 of 2)
Hi again, Rosey! There were only two major comments that I really had with this part. Firstly, I want to say that it is indeed a major, major improvement over ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: The Knight's Secret (1 of 2)
Hi Rosey! I didn't really enjoy this. I can definitely see some potential in it, but right now it's just very rough. I had to read it through about three ...
May 2, 2010 -
Re: Sydney~The Follow up
Hi! So I read this over twice, and I was thinking one thing: slow down! In the first part, you had a lot of moments of subtly that really allowed ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Report A Site Bug
Well, for some reason, I can't write in Navita's guestbook. Whenever I try to, it just refreshes the page. I asked Rosey Unicorn about it, and she said it wasn't ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Navita is the Member of the Month for May 2010
Congrats! :D
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Raindrops
So, for a few reasons, including but not limited to the need to review more, an increasing amount of homework, and regressing organizational skills, I've decided to set up my ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Medusa
In the city of Athens, the Parthenon stood as the temple to Athena, the virgin goddess of wisdom and strategy. There, she was aided by many priestesses who had sworn ...
May 1, 2010 -
Re: Post Your Pic Here [7]
Ooh, very pretty. Everyone here is so gorgeous.
May 1, 2010