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Hi Sarebear! What's up? I think I quite liked the image you were trying to create with this poem. The problem is that I don't think it delivers the way ...

Hi! So, this is quite an interesting story. There's a lot going on-you've got a sadistic killer who has a strange, lustful attraction the the girl he's murdering. It's very ...

Erika Lily Erika flopped on the bed. It was very comfortable, and the room was more luxurious then anything she had ever seen or experienced. She liked it, but she ...

Hi! You know, of all the poems I've read of yours so far, I think this is the best. I like that's it simple and fun. I just had two ...

*Thanks for the offer, Lauren, but it's not needed. He'll be about to put to put Erika on trial, but he recognizes who she is rather quickly and he's not ...

My Profile: Name: Karine Bloom Age: 24 Gender: Female With?: Against the New Court Appearance: Karine is about five feet, eight inches tall with a lean, muscular build. She has ...

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Hi! I just had a few quick comments. First of all, I agree with Hope that the negative makes it look a lot cooler. Everything is a lot brighter, more ...

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10/10 :smt027

Hi Scarlett. Thanks for this critique. However, this is from November and I've already moved on from this story. While I value your advice, this is really old, so I'm ...

Guys, check the dates. This is over a year old.

Hi! So, I don't know what to think of this poem right now. To me, it seems like an outline of something that could be much, much better. Well, first ...

Guys, check the dates/board. This is from January, and it's in storybook archives (where old, dead storybooks are posted).

Hi Kara! So, I really liked the story! In a way it felt my own story feel more complete, like it filled in a lot of gaps, and I just ...