Elijah

I had already reviewed your beggining even if i needed to say my opinion for the prologue first but anyways.I'm here to do that now! XD I still think your ...

The plot is interesting!The start is also.Changing the tenses..this was what i actually noticed to happen mostly in this piece of art.I think it can be corrected with training.The story ...

First of all,i think you need to rate your prologue as 16+ and maybe the whole story that you will be writing because of some parts of it.I don't know ...

I think the start is not that appealing atleast for me and the grammar errors kind of made me think...why not stop even reading this?But i actually say that you ...