Elephant

I agree with Brian, take out the hyphen in the first line. It would benefit from that. Nice imagery though in the first line. Interesting read, don't really have much ...

when I read the title I was immediatly in the frame of mind of a Frost work. What I liked - 1. the inner-stanza rhyme, it lead a nice feel ...

Thanks for the welcome all. I know this is late, but I've been stuck in Ohio for 2 weeks with internet connection. -El-

Thanks Matt, I fixed that I hope it's easier now. -El-

right now...ummm...let me check ahh yesssss my 'monkeys come in the night and steal my underwear' boxers a black and grey longish sleeve Rolling Stones shirt my beige cargos my ...

8 The monkey one cracked me up as well as the last one. :)

7, its nice and pastely (is that even a word?).

Thank you TS, and niteowl for seeing that typo, I'll go fix it. -El-

Twinkling Starz, thank you for your kind words, Sherbet as well. I've always wondered if it was Sherbert or Sherbet...well that was random... Soni, thank you for the crit, I'll ...

Star Wars....I need to go find mine. right now, Velvet Revolver...probably will change to Paul Simon in a bit

you married that black scarf that hooks around your neck like a rosyboa the brim hat you wear on sundays has pot shots on the top from the squirrel gun ...

Nice. Had a laugh over this line, very clever “You can call me Greg, and if that won’t do you can call anything so long as you’re consistent. Anything but ...

Seems like something System of the Down would write. Sweet all the same. -El-

anyone who listens to Fugazi is my hero.

ahh political science, such a great class to doze off in. I was at Crater Lake last weekend, snowboarding with some friends of mine, this inspired this piece. My own ...