Elephant

This is my new project I am working on. This is just the second draft, so bear with me here. All comments and suggestions are welcome. Rated for language... EL ...

8 The monkey one is really funny at this time of the morning and the last one just cracks me up. EL

But it's the Cheshire! nevermind... heheheh I got a laugh from yours, so I give it a 8! wheee.... (this is way to earlier to be at the if I ...

I really like the face, and the detail work down on the armor and the arm. But the body stance seems wrong, like his torso is twisting in the wrong ...

reformat to make it easier for us to read, but you already know that... still very much intrigued to where this is going. the proper crit offer is still there ...

The first sentance really drew me in, well the whole first paragraph really. I enjoyed this, and am going to read the rest you posted. Just as Angel said I ...

"Look guys El is back, to do some reviewin'." 'Hah.' I say to Jack's comment about overcrowding, 'More newbies means more people to push around and do the dirty work.' ...

I have this thing with body art, I think it's incredibly sexy. It's not something I look for on people or parners but that's my feeling. I myself have two ...

hahahhah, I got quite a laugh out of this. I really enjoyed the conversation between the narrator and the robot. Also the bit about un-uniqueness. Being a Hitchhiker's fan myself ...

oooo flying elephants... ^ likes Firefly...w00t

hmmm...I like it, as I am interested to read more. Some nitpicks I found. 1. part of her citys destruction - it should be city's 2. their city and the ...

at this hour, one word captures my thoughts, -genius-. maybe if you want I'll do a more indepth critique. -El-

It seems a trend here, using the allusions and imagery of the cold. Here it goes... you have to be worse to get better - I am not sure I ...

hmmm...I probably shouldn't be trying to decifer this at this hour, oh well. I liked how you began this poem, it made me what to read more. Norway...hmm? that was ...

I caught a typo in the 1st line of the 2 stanza, it should be spontaneity , but I agree with Brian it was easy to read and the ending ...