ElementalBlood

Hi newbie :P I'll try to give you a decent review but, I write these things the same way I'd say the words. If that makes things confusing... (Sorry in ...

Amazing ^_^ First of all, props to you for writing in present tense. Most tend to avoid it because it's difficult to keep up. But I didn't see a single ...

Gotta agree with Miracles and Gryphon. We need...information! Now, I'm not a fan of info-dumping. Overloading someone with too much information at ones makes their brains melt and drip out ...

Nerissa cowered away from her now furious father. Tears threatened to escape the sanctuary of her eyes but Nerissa would not let them. Not now, not in front of her ...

OK, sorry this took so long. A Trojan hijacked my computer. The trumpets rang out loud and clear, their noise slicing through the hubbub on the on looking crowds, their ...

Please continue this! So, as the story starts out we have a man (Warq) sizing up a woman for sale. Then we have the woman's point of view as well ...

First thing that comes to mind: you need to write more of this. Don't leave us hanging here! Okay, let's continue then Apart from a large assortment of grammar issues ...

Okay, let's start this! To fight is to not. To not let your opponent to see your emotions, to not let them anticipate your next move. To not show mercy, ...

Since everyone before me seems to have taken care of the boring, pointing-out-errors type editing, it seems like I can focus more on the plot type editing. Well, more like ...

I like it ^_^ It's a short prologue and a lot of information is crammed in there. Putting spaces between each paragraph would help a bit. Just to make things ...

(Yay, finally got around to reading this!) Poor Ariana :/ Not only is she far away from anyone she knows, she has to care for two very strange boys. I ...

Must...resist...laughter... *Fails* XD! Okay, I'm done. *Wipes away tears from laughing so hard* I'm not very picky about grammar unless it's absolutely awful. You learn forgiveness while teaching peo

I was waiting for this! ^_^ I definitely enjoy this novel, so far. I can't say anything for what I haven't read yet ;P Still waiting for why it's under ...

*facepalm* this piece is so true...Haha. When you get stuck, you feel like slamming the book closed and ignoring it. Calc and Algebra both suck :/ they remind me of ...

Starting out: The beginning is incredibly confusing. I thought for the first bit that this story would be told in third person. When you first said "I say alien" it ...