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*is a little confused about what Zzap's talking about* I didn't notice to much weird in it, maybe a little more description, and the girl, Ama’Ali seemed a bit forced. ...

How do people like my style in that peice? And what do you think I should be making better, or think is already good enough? sorry, I must ask these ...

I'm not the worlds greatest poet, in fact I'm really bad at it, and don't now anything about them. But this poem deffinately reminds me of me. Just thiught I'd ...

...anyone at all...

*five thumbs up* Love it! It flows really well.

thanks EBM, but tell me what you didn't understand, then I can fix it. Zzap: If the person who spilt the beer was another fairy he would give him a ...

Your faeries are structurally unbalanced however. You need to know exactely what they stand for, what they do, and what are their limitations. As a writer, each and every character ...

There's something you're telling me that I'm not to sure on, just a sec...

Yeah, the amnesia thing was a little unbeleivable, but otherwise I really liked it! The emotion came through really well.

I really like that last line!!!! Sort of reminds me of... me.

I fixed a few of the things, and tried to italisise the thoughts, but I reacon I missed some.

Other stuff, we read books etc. She wasn't a bad teacher, she just knew that most people arn't fond of grammer. Really, I haven't leant much grammer since primary school. ...

I've had a history of English teachers who don't like to teach grammer. I resorted to taking my old grammer book home from previous years and finishing myself. It's not ...

Oh yes! They're good!

Thank you!!!! :D :D :D I only learnt about run on sentences last week, and havn't edited it since then, so that's why I had so many. Thanks for pointing ...