Ego

Those numbers aren't set in stone--there are often more than three squads to a platoon, especially in times of war, when units are often broken down and resorted due to ...

This thing is heavy, he thought, maybe eighty pounds. This thought sounds unrealistic to me. It sounds more like you anted an excuse to say "The armor weighs 80lbs" than ...

I'm not diggin' this, at the moment--you throw at us two descriptions and two names, but no real introduction to the characters or the setting. We have no idea why ...

Wow, I'm surprised this would even need to be said. Of course people might not like something you've done, but no one should ever yell at you for an opinion... ...

Eamon would have no problem speaking with Anzius. Get with me on MSN and we'll run some scenarios.

I entered the house stealthily, as anyone as seasoned as myself would. It was easy – from what I heard, there were only three residents: two adults, presumably the parents, ...

Final ruling--the child would have been brought on board to be sold as a love slave, if anything. If you're okay with that, she can stay.

It felt good running down his throat, this choking smoke that was the product of the burning cigarette held between his lips. He removed it with two fingers clamped lightly ...

Hi Freedom-- Interesting concept--not terribly original, but what is, these days? You've made it your own by establishing both protagonist (even though we don't know her name), antagonists (along with

RRIIINNNGGG! Onomatopoeia looks amateurish--shy away from it, whenever possible. The bus started moving. This is nitpicky, but I'd recommend saying something about the bus driver making the bus move--

Eamon D'Arnise "And thank you for the grub and those weapons, I must say this is a rather interesting instrument, much more polite than using your hands, eh? Rather like ...

Twenty minutes after you post your story? What do you think we are, Domino's Pizza? 30 Minutes or it's free? Yeah, definitely not. First off! Your title needs some work. ...

But to no avail! For the floor farthest beneath me suddenly gives way and the entire Tower is reduced by one level, but it should be noted that this reduction ...

Kitty! ...And Dono. >.>

Current Situation As of Jiggity's last post, everything in the battle is resolved. The whole of the slave group is on the top deck now, taking care of the wounded ...