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Saul He ignored the good-natured comments, the taunts, the smiles. The vampires were being repelled, and with ease, but only from the Ghost perspective. Many of the human guards lay ...

OverEasy and I have decided that Saul is to be Caressa's mentor, seeing as she is brand new to the Ghost Squad. Objections, comments, concerns?

Saul Saul's face, a mask of pure concentration, matched his brisk pace as he strode down the corridor leading to the containment chamber for the Arcanist's Globe. However, he knew ...

Are villains absolutely necessary at the moment? We haven't even started the storybook yet, yet alone had time to develop our individual characters.

You post the storybook and then aren't on your messengers to discuss it? For shame!

I'm in, of course. Character pending conversation with Jig or Jack.

Name: Saul Ranneck Age: 35 Gender: Male Height: 6'1" Weight: 170lbs. Hair: Brown buzz cut Eyes: Blue Magic: Black, literally causing darkness instead of light. Artifact: Blackened steel gauntlets cons

Not hard hitting enough. Too whimsical for a piece dealing with the loss of someone's future. Why a centaur? How is it he is able to bargain for something that ...

Flemmy I'm not quite sure what is meant by this. "A no-nonsense look that he had learned to know was covering her features"? A quick fix should help out. Changed. ...

The sad part might be how right you were about me reading it because I saw the word 'zombie.' xD

Collaboration between myself and OverEasy ...long time in the making, and this is just the first part. We'll be updating as we go. As always, comments, critiques and opinions are ...

I'm on my Mobile right now, so I can't be as detailed as your poem deserves, but I'll do my best to express my comments. Some of your rhythm stammers ...

A very typical Grecian view of the Underworld. Punished by being forced to go through the same pain over and over until the end of time. Since it's so common, ...

On pace; you take this far too quickly! You move from one paragraph of running from a bully straight into a fantasy-type setting; give us a little more time to ...

Name: Udre (Oo-drey) Thunderhammer Race: Dwarf Class: Rogue/Warrior Occupation: retired Imperial Thunderer turned blacksmith Age: 160 Height: 4'6" Weight: 200 lbs. Gear: -- "Thundermaul" Rifle--uses a