Ego

I'll be editing this post as necessary to reflect updates in the story (as a plot synopsis for late joiners...)and cast. Cast Name : Vincent Williams (Buscador!) Age: 30 Height ...

Y'all may or may not know me. I used to do a bit of storybooking in my day, and decided it's past time I get back into the game. If ...

Captain Aurelio Delrey This is the group they gave me? Aurelio shrugged his broad shoulders, adjusting the slightly-too-small longcoat that had been provided for him. What a ragtag group. He ...

Name: Captain Aurelio Delrey Age: 43 Description: The grizzled veteran. A long, meticulous, salt and pepper mustache connecting to chops that would make a redcoat blush. His mail armor is ...

This was Cody’s first migration, he wasn’t even yet a year old and he was nervous, as usual, about this new thing. Watch for run-on sentences. I only noticed this ...

Badges. Like Xbox Live Achievements for YWS. People will strive to get more badges by performing better on the site. Just my two cents. -D

Prologue Expand this, please. In my opinion it's too short to really be an effective introduction to the rest of your story. How would this trade route work?” I listened ...

It appeared that they were going to make the invaders earn every inch. Makes it sound like they're happy to give it to them, so long as they deserve it. ...

Good read! I'm not sure if there's more to it or not, but even if there isn't, it's a good standalone piece. I only have a couple nitpicks, because the ...

How's it end, exactly? I'd like to use either Dreffan or Seraph, depending.

Fair enough! I see where you're coming from. My main reason for pointing that out is because the dialogue is very formal, and formality is attributed to humans, it seemed ...

Tiffany's DnD character, Dracen. Enjoy, comment, complain--watevs.

Yeah Nate, and a sword is so commonly used in writing :P

I think it should be a quill >.>

Hi Kira ^^ Welcome to YWS! If you can make it through the massive block of rules, introductions, and info-dumps that precedes this post, I will be thoroughly impressed. Don't ...