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Great story, just let me point out some errors The wind whipped at my hair like an angry beast, whispering dark secrets into my ears. The street was empty; the ...

You have great story going on here, only problem your grammar and sentence construction. Eg. Two years ago the father of Joe and Sara passed away with little notice, and ...

Great Story, only thing was that you seemed to be using She alot in the beginning. ex: She also happened to be extraordinarily bright. She astounded her tutors everyday with ...

Great beginning, this certainly has alot of potential. The only thing I had a problem with was that it all seemed to rushed for me. But I am sure since ...