Earthfire713

Hello! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, great sentence: I was thirteen years old when I was kidnapped. It catches the reader's attention right away ...

Hi Junglelover! I'm Earthfire and I'll be your reviewer today. First of all, I would like to suggest that you add a little more description into here. Describe Jessica's feelings ...

Oh my goodness. That was amazing. You did such a great job at building up suspense and letting us see the entire thing through a child's eyes. All that I ...

Wow. This was really good. It sounded just like the narrative in a published book. :smt001 I couldn't really find anything wrong with it, except one thing: “Hold! Hold! A ...

Hi! I'm Earthfire, and I'll be your reviewer today. There are only a few things that I would like to point out: The night was a gentle one by any ...

Hi KAH! I thought that this was a sad story, especially at the end. The only thing that I did not understand was why did the MC die at the ...

Wow. This was really cool. Do you like Tolkien? Your writing style reminded me of his. :smt001 I couldn't really find any mistakes in this, except one: But it was ...

Hi Jojo! This story sounds interesting, and the title sounds cool. I can't wait to see how fantasy comes into it. I couldn't find any grammar errors or anything. I ...

Hi Clara! I'm Earthfire. Your story seems really interesting so far. The only thing I have to say is about this paragraph. “Thomas.” I was standing at the bottom of ...

I liked it! Normally, I'm not really into realistic fiction but I could relate with this book because my brother is autistic too, and I can understand how Catherine feels ...

Hi, I'm Earthfire, and I'll be your reviewer today. This story has a lot of potential. Here are just some nitpicks I found: The sound of wood against wood drew ...

Wow. I really liked this story, although it was kind of creepy. I also thought it was interesting to read a story written in second person POV. :smt001 I've never ...

Hi babymagic! This story has a lot of promise. I found several nitpicks, thought, so here goes... "Quickly, we must not be seen," He said. Walking with brisk strides he ...

Hi W-Lupus! This was an interesting story, and I thought it was more unique than other werewolf stories. I also liked how you mixed in a scientific explanation. :smt001 The ...

Hi Ultraviolet! This was an interesting story, and I really want to know more. Here are just some nitpicks I found: I know what your thinking. And you can just ...