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Okay here's chapter 2, it's a little rough, so please comment. By the way, italics is Elf's dream... Here in a solid white room. There are no definite walls, it ...

I think this is an excellent start and the errors I saw were already touched by everyone else. I'd really like to have been able to read more, and you ...

Hey! I really actually like this poem, it wasn't one of those fake, "oh he loves me," or, "It was a stupid lie," it was really realistic. You know how ...

Hey I am Erin, and let's first start with what I thought could be improved. I agree partially with TenYo, on how long your lines are, it's almost intimating to ...

Hey, I'm Erin. I really like it, and the way you had used different fonts, made it very unique and fun to read. Though some of your fonts were a ...

Hi I'm Erin. When I read this, I actually liked it. I am not a big fan of these types of stories, but it was very interesting. I like how ...

Hey I am Erin, and first off I actually really liked this poem. It is very dramatic, and I love how you described the life:loathsomeness. Also, the flow of this ...

Hey BeautifulDoom. This is Erin, and first off, love it overall. It was very original. I walk through the evil doors Love the image This place is filled with trashy ...

Chapter 1 “Hurry up! We’ll be late at this rate Fate,” Brandon tugged on her arm flirtatiously. The sky was smoking setting thick grey clouds above their heads. It engulfed ...

Hey girl! It's Erin, and well actually I have to agree with what everyone else has said. I've read probably 50 of your poems, and I really don't actually feel ...

To me writting is the only place where I don't have to worry about being someone everyone wants me to be. It's a time when I can embrace all my ...

Hi! I'm Erin I really did enjoy this, i liked the flow and the rhythme. There was only two things that stood out to me, and that was when you ...

Hey Sarah this is Erin, just some minor point outs and room for improvement right here. Paragraph 1 Your very repetitive, it's like four sentences on just Mrs. Smith walking. ...

When I write, i usually only write in 3rd person. I was wondering which is better to use? I like how 1st person captures feelings but i like how 3rd ...

Fast Forward This war was before our time child. As you wish to hear information, to know why our world is the way it is today, we must start at ...