Duskglimmer

This is amazing! I am in love with the names... particularly Ready and Distance. I'm pretty sure that when I have children you will be called upon for name suggestions. ...

I've never used the name Serifina, so I guess it must have been somewhere else.

go to and look up the meaning of the name "Sera". I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

Jiggy - Thanks so much for going over it. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll fix the mistakes soon (can't be a work by Dusky without awkwardly long sentences and ...

Possibly... I'm planning on writing the wedding just for my own enjoyment (character exploration exercises) and it may end up in the story if I can find a proper place ...

Blue Haze - Thank you. In all honesty, I'm not really even thinking that betrayal is a big theme here (if it comes into play at all). But that could ...

You're welcome. Here's the rest of my critique: Marcus watched the coroner follow a few men with Janette’s cloaked body on a plank out of the house. There was no ...

Jessie slipped off, beginning to sort through the racks again while I stepped inside the dressing room. Once I had the dress on, I wished I never had to take ...

*laughs* that's okay, Ari darling... I wrote this mostly for myself anyway, and I've decided that that's probably all it's ever going to be... I wanted to say that last ...

You're right. This does belong in Romantic Fiction and I've moved it there... I think I meant to post it there in the first place (that's what I get for ...

You're welcome. But let's just dive right into the story, shall we? Your first paragraph is hard to get into. A lot of the sentences are awkward and a bit ...

* * * The Mall was crowded that afternoon and Kelly, Jessie, Christy and I took our time threading our way through the masses of people that were hurrying about. ...

the contest was a race to see who could get out first. I'll try and go back over that and make it clearer. And as for being worried about what's ...

Hearing the warning bell, I took off, almost running to make it to class on time. When I got there, I sank into my seat, breathing heavily as I set ...

* * * The rest of the weekend passed quietly with Leo out of town. Chad and Patrick went to some concert or another on Saturday night. I saw Jessie ...