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Re: To poetry and imagination
‘Which planet were you visiting?’ The teacher mockingly asks, ‘Probably another solar system.’ The student at the back laughs ‘I’m sorry ma’am’- A failed attempt smile, indignantly loo
Aug 16, 2011 -
Re: Metastatic
I still don't get the title, probably coz I'm low on vocab- nehu. That could cause a bruise, right? will this be would, or is it a thought? shock each ...
Aug 15, 2011 -
Re: Second Glance by Jodi Picoult
Hehe...I'm reviewing a review. :D Newayz, I am also a Picoult fan and I read 19 minutes and Sister's keeper, amazingly beautiful stories by an awesome writer. And you're a ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: There's A Whole Where Your Name Should Be
Well, I can certainly see that you are unhappy with your parents. Your expression, imagery, grammar, punction were all really good. I hope you are content with your work because ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: The Black Path
Kiran felt her heart drop into her toes as she stared at him- this sounded very....wrong for some reason. I like the imagery, just enough for me. And well good ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: In the Shattered Mirror: a picture of my life
Gazing into a mirror that’s cracked, I see a distorted reflection. This, I know, deep inside. But from the shallower walls Of my soul Come cries of pain at the ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Trip to Earth (Prequel to Scarless)
The coral maze was her favorite view. Fishes of all colors and size scattered in every direction. The deep blue surrounding the creatures sprang into ripples as an effect of ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Discovering the Power
Your a new writer and your writing says that, though I don't know if it's supposed to be this way. Some of your statements were redundant or some words from ...
Aug 11, 2011 -
Re: Agony
Great imagery but I still don't get the whole story. Descibe more at the beginnig and end to give your reader a clearer concept. the mid part flowed well. as ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Music
Well, first I'd like to say welcome. I'm sort of new too but I still think that I maybe able to help you, if you need any. The people with ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Seas of deception
Deception is here, Deception is there, Deception is with her, Is there a truthful place? I presume you are referring to Earth, then don't put a general word like place, ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: Paradise; Lost
I hope I understood your poem's inner meaning because it looks.....deep and well expressed. The punctuation, grammar, and imagery, I guess, was very good. The flow and pace was nice. ...
Aug 10, 2011 -
Re: The Curse of Friendship
I think the idea of poetr isn't exactly literary flow but it should feel flowing to the heart and mind and real poetry that comes from the heart has a ...
Aug 9, 2011 -
Re: Future
What can I do? Was I right? I made a choice -i thought it was right, The rhyming words are the same words, maybe if you changed the 2nd right ...
Aug 9, 2011 -
Re: Abstract Play
That was very impressive, you have good colouring skills or was it painted Because for some reason it looked to me like glass painting. And thanx for the advice, I ...
Aug 8, 2011
