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Re: Forgive
Forgive Is this the title? …….Forgive the ground: unfertile, dry. we usually say Infertile land, make infertile, dry’ the next line. …………………we are irrelevent just the same. irrelev
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Serpent's Teeth [1]
Lord, you write huge stuff! I’m not an avid reader or expert writer, I’ll simply say what I feel. Hope you’re fine with that. piano sounding sour, feels a bit ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Freedom
I'm sick of this life That this maze of pain and sadness I want to get out I don't belong to this world I broke the chains that binds me ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: White lines
Started out little , smoking weed 'til it's dry I feel that punctuation was missing here later needing something different, something else to try So let me introduce myself , ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: Only Hope
your sweet poison infects my blood stream, from this line create a new paragraph and like wise do so every time u change the rhyming pattern. The song..or was it ...
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: Alone, but alive
Happy birthday, I am quite right twenty This felt redundant- the qiute right part having been cursed for this latter decade to share what do u mean by a date ...
Sep 8, 2011 -
Re: Purity Lost
The rain trickled down on her perfectly done, auburn hair. Rain droplets joined the tears on her makeup-caked rosy cheeks. Well, I’m not an avid reader, maybe that’s y- but ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: One with Serenity
Sunlight peeks through the clouds and dances on the tips of blades, green and rich as moss in a swamp. I see u’re breaking sentences, it gives this sort of ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: The Fate I Never Chose
Since when are u a poet? Oh and an epic one too! (I'm being my toughest critic- don't mind.) You actually have good imagery, it’s like describing in a story ...
Sep 7, 2011 -
Re: Music and memory
##The portions in italics are from 'If I die young' by I think 'The Band Perry' or sth similar. This song is being heard## If I die young, bury me ...
Sep 6, 2011 -
Re: Heavenly Dark
Sometimes black,And sometimes white. But always in time This sounds more appropriate To make it right. You twist shatter flows in better my heartInto a million pieces,And catch my breathUntil ...
Sep 5, 2011 -
Re: Facing reality
Waking up we brush our teeth and start complaining about everything we wish we had and never got and everything we have but can’t appreciate. It’s sad but true, like ...
Sep 4, 2011 -
Re: The Nobody I’m Proud Of Being
I sometimes feel sick and tired of seeing my friends take on the road with courage and determination, A* diploma%u2019s in their clutches, on the way to glory, when%u2026I%u2019m left ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Moment of Truth
AWWW, thank you. I know you can relate, this is for other students to relate to.
Aug 16, 2011 -
Re: Moment of Truth
Sweaty palms, shivering arms, goosebumps: all that's felt Stomach trying to knot itself, lungs trying to collapse, The little, vital object: the heart has given up it's aim- 'Beat no ...
Aug 16, 2011
