Dubaian

My apologies for the time lag, it has been a rather busy half a year, but I shall endure. I'm taking all of your points into consideration, and dont worry ...

Thanks very much for the review suzu. I was thinking about those commas before but I thought it was meant to be a full stop, will find something on dialogue ...

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