DrunkOnWriting

hello:) I was wondering if you'd take a look at my novel "Has Ben, Never Was". I posted it a while ago and took a short break from YWS (busy ...

wow. I see I'm quite late to this one so there's not much I can say in the way of helpful I'll just say WOW. Ares shifted in his seat, ...

KA-BOOM. this is marvelous. check out the first chapter of my novel "Has Ben, Never Was" thanks kiddos:)

Anger red with passion smolders deep within my heart, Vigor charged with orange gives my muscles a kick start. A shining sun illuminates my skin from yellow skies, While fire ...

You are SUCH a talented writer! This poem seriously almost made me cry...such powerful emotions. I don't write this well when I have writers block ;) After reading it twice, ...

The sun illuminated the letters, each contour glowing perfectly in the waning light of the late afternoon. I stood there, letting the scene below scorch my heart further with each ...

hmmm...this poem seems a bit messy. You may want to clean it up a little. And I cry when no one when wipes up my messy failures and doubt and ...

I woke slowly, furious at whoever was hitting my head with a hammer. As my heavy eyes parted, I saw there was no person, nor any hammers, in sight. Ignoring ...

A gorgeous poem, I really like the concept! Your imagery is beautiful, and the poem itself is well written. My only concern is the lack of punctuation. This is a ...

Wow, I really loved this! A very clever setup, with powerful, well written content. Nicely done! Only one thing...I think that these should be written vertically, as stanzas: Egypt, democracy ...

The trees flew by, the last bit of sun throwing its light onto the vibrant leaves. Delicious wind kissed my skin, streaming through my hair and letting me fly. The ...

Better! You just need to tweak the punctuation a bit...some of those commas I believe should be periods. For example: Without these dreams, Hopes and fears, You can’t be, Your ...

Very well written...how true your message is as well. Your first stanza perfectly captures the invincible teenage mindset. I really liked this, aside from the morbid topic. Just a few ...

WOW. Incredible work, wicked imagery, extremely well written. The emotions are very prominent, and the poem has that dark, wicked beauty to it...well done! As for critiquing, I couldn't really ...

Beautiful piece, I thought there could have been more to it...the poem was a bit skimpy but if you build on it you could really create something beautiful Not really ...