Dreamworx95

@BlueAfrica @Thundahguy @shima @AlyTheBookworm

Hi Kanome, thank you for reading! You're definitely right about Persephone putting on a strong front, very good way to describe her personality. She acts like she's tough but she ...

Hi Blue, I didn't realize I was using so many short paragraphs. I think it's something I may do unconsciously when my characters are in motion and I'm imagining time ...

Hi Aly, thank you for the review! I didn't realize I use ellipses that much. I guess I do overdescribe Hades' expressions here. Great nits, I will have to keep ...

Thank you Kanome, I appreciate you diving into this story. About the "wood": ""Wood" refers to a delineated area larger than a grove but smaller than a forest. "Woods" refers ...

Hi Blue, thanks for reading along so far and recommending this story to people. I am working 40 hours a week so I spend my free time writing and I ...

Hi ZeldaIsSheik, just wanted to drop by and say I read through this looking for something to critique, but BlueAfrica has pretty much pointed out everything I wanted to comment ...

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Hi Thundahguy, thanks for sticking with this story. I thought I'd reply to this critique first. The reason why I've sort of glossed over the trials is because of word ...

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