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Hi Erika! Thank you for reading, and I really love that you enjoyed this! I agree with you about the slow, descriptive pacing throughout the chapter. It's something I slip ...

Haha, man that was brutal. Thanks for sticking around even though it put you off in the beginning. It was definitely experimental. You make a lot of good points. There's ...

Morrigan, thank you for the in depth look at this poem! I love your suggestion of performing this with another person. That's an amazing idea that I will try to ...

Carlito, amazingly helpful critiques, as always! These are some really awesome nits. I have to say that some of your nits should have been obvious to me. Thanks for pointing ...

Such wonderful comments! Thank you for taking the time to read this! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I agree that this chapter needs more descriptions. I also struggle with ...

Carlito, these are some really great nits! I can tell you put a lot of time and care into this review and I appreciate it so much! I can't wait ...

I can see how the slashes are confusing. They are markers that indicate where one sentence ends/another begins and flows right into the next, like this/is where I would change ...

If I break it down in complete sentences, it's: "I don't want to see them anymore. Anymore of their words will make me explode but I've held my tongue for ...

Thank you for the lovely compliments. The slashes are really distracting structurally, I know. It's meant to be a spoken word poem so they are just there as signals for ...

Hi Viv, nice to meet you too! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! I did actually mean "I don't want to see them anymore/of their words will make me explode" ...

Thank you for reading!

LordofLit101, thank you for reviewing this chapter! I'm so glad you're already interested! I'm also really happy to hear that it seemed really casual at first - the first few ...

Rockycait, so happy you liked this! I'm glad you spotted some nitpicky things and would love to hear what can be done to make this better, but I'm just glad ...

Thank you, CookiesAndCream! I enjoy your encouraging comments. I'd love to hear any suggestions you have for improvement, and I really appreciate you commenting on how much you loved this!

Falconer, what a wonderful review! I really appreciate that you enjoyed this story so much!