Dreamwalker

you're very jetty with your sentences. It would make more sense if they flowed together more and made it seem less robotic and more humanly, kind of like the character ...

Chapter 2 : A little shot of crimson The walk had been silent, slow paced, and calming. My jacket was tied loosely around my waist, blonde hair spiking in different ...

First off, i will start with my general opinion of the story. I thought it was fairly well written. the idea is somewhat catchy and i did enjoy reading it ...

Definitly a great improvement! Very enjoyable and you still kept the same passion that the first version had. I can really tell the difference between adam and landon now and ...

Well banned for being 13 and not realizing that you actually NEED therapy.

Chapter 1 : Black and White [Warning: I forgot to mention this when i first set this up, but this story is fairly 'heavy' i guess you could say. its ...

Just a few mistakes. Nothing to serious. i found the storyline to be kind of rushed and not very descriptive, of course i could understand this for most of the ...

There is a few grammer mistakes that could have been fixed, and a few parts that are unclear like the names of the characters and such. i got lost differentiating ...

I really love the fantasy genre but I'm mostly a romantic when it comes to writing. I really want to go into different styles but prodominantly i am a romance ...

Thank you so much. I amvery grateful for your kind words and i hope to learn a lot about my own style of writing and everyone elses.

Hello people of YWS. I'm kind of new here... yah i'm sure you probably realised this. I'm just trying to break the ice really. I hope to start posting up ...