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Re: To Fall or Rise: Chapter 1
Hello- I just want to say that I love your beginning sentence, it really draws in and intrigues the reader. This sentence has a small keep of mystery and it ...
Oct 27, 2013 -
Re: Coldblooded Heart (Prologue and Chapter 1)
(Prologue) You start off with saying "I watch him from the shadows." Which is in first person but then right after you say "The man walks back home, staggering, drunken ...
Aug 18, 2013 -
Re: Ace and Det -- Prolog
Ok so I would like to say that just reading the first three sentences it made me kind of want to turn away, the beginning sentences are a little childish. ...
Aug 17, 2013 -
Re: Humanity
Well I think that it is really cool that you are trying out lyrics. I do have to say that this particular piece seeems more like a poem then a ...
Aug 15, 2013 -
Re: The Girl Who Never Smiled
Hello, This story is really good, I think it has a little bit of bleakness inside of it but I realy think it has great potential and is really well ...
Aug 15, 2013 -
Re: Innocuous Evil
Hello, I just want to say wow. I have to admit I really live mystery/suspense stories. I have always been the girl who watches all those crime shows on TV ...
Aug 15, 2013 -
Re: The Diary of the Sluttiest Virgin
I really like this and can't wait to see how this all comes together. I have tried to write diary entries as stories before and have never really gotten it ...
Aug 14, 2013
