Dream_Catcher

I remember when we held onto each other When we had each other’s hands, Unable— unwilling to let go And then all at once you let go of me Let ...

good. simple. but good. i didnt catch any grammatical errors, but other than that i like the build of temptation but i think the title kind of takes away from ...

“Sitting at the tide’s bare feet, you offer me this gift. You send me ferry and take me far adrift. Asking if I like the salt or mist upon my ...

I like this but i have a few bones to pick. well i think the repetition is fine as the end rhyme but perhaps changing the 'one things for sure' ...

i like this a lot! i like the fact that it is a journey and the full circle-ness of it! :) only thing that kind of erked me was the ...

***to be read with INCREASING PANIC! :o Temptation. Temptation. I know what it is I’ve heard of its dangers And it charm… It’s shiny, drawing charm I want it, I ...

I wrote the 'before' about three years ago and reading it over I got a better idea of how to write it and now think the old version is rather ...

alright. i understood all of it except for one line. Tears fall inside perhaps you should elaborate. other than that i agree with the comment before i did like the ...

Alrighty! Well I like the concept of giving and the way you used it. I'm not one to pick on grammar because if i'd probably make it worse if i ...

WELCOME TO YWS!!! :) but for the poem it was very simple. I didn't really notice any obvious grammar mishaps but as for the style I believe its more of ...

Just kind of wrote it for fun. I'm sure as writers you've heard this all before. If you have anything to add comment it!! It’s too abstract I don’t get ...

hmmm well i'm a christian and i feel you on the topic and your message. I'm not really going to comment about the style of the poem only because I ...

hmm this is very interesting and very original i must say. i've never read a poem about a cigarette or wanting one. Anyhu to the poem. very smooth with language ...

Okie dokie. The poem flowed very smoothly; it has a good rhythm. However, with the words i find it a but cliche. The concept is used I'm sure you know-- ...

Yea i did mean Featured. oops! but thank you both!! great help!!