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Re: Decadence
We're supposed to write an allegory for English. Basically it's supposed to be a story with an overriding thesis, and the thesis is proved through the use of symbolism. The ...
Nov 14, 2010 -
Re: Kettle Corn (continued)
I posted the first half of this the other day. This is a 'continued' version. Mod: Rated for language. ~ She stood at the window, her tank top hanging off ...
Nov 3, 2010 -
Re: kettle corn (unfinished)
She stood at the window, her tank top hanging off her bird-bone shoulders. She couldn’t think with all this noise. She loved Chicago, but she was not accustomed to living ...
Nov 2, 2010 -
Re: Ending.
Sitting on the hardest hat, Pretending. Footsteps shuffle in their haste, Unending. Practicing slowly and stiff, Ascending. Hearts of roses wet with snow, Depending. Untrained arms and hopeful ears, E
Oct 4, 2010 -
Re: Hello, my name is.
The best compliment I ever got was from a 7 year old girl who told me that I had “hair like a princess.” It was long and blonde, and when ...
Sep 24, 2010 -
Re: Children
Sticky fingers and licorice laces, Gooey smiles: sheepish and shy. Purple tongues point out of sugar lips, Eyes squeeze in mockery, playful and shallow. Promises are kept, Lies are unheard ...
Aug 3, 2010 -
Re: Lonely
Lingering footsteps, a hint of a sigh; Once beautiful whispers, now lukewarm and dry. Hair rubs on shoulders, an old coat of paint; Waking used to be hell, now morning's ...
Aug 2, 2010 -
Re: The Life of a Teenage Girl
Melodies woven of petty despairs and shallow depressions, Hopeless ships sunk precisely when predicted. Laughter comes only in comfort, Happiness in short bursts of freedom. Perfection is undefinabl
Aug 1, 2010 -
Re: Horizons of Lashes
Try not to laugh when you read this. I've always known that I'm awful at any sort of poetry, so this is my first attempt at actually writing something in ...
Jul 28, 2010 -
Re: Getting adjusted
I wrote this last year for my English class. The assignment was just to write a "personal narrative," which is basically a short story about something that has really happened ...
Jul 10, 2010 -
Re: Picture Perfect: Chapter One
#1: Some nitpicky things that I found. A lot of this is just stylistic and my personal opinion, if you don't like it you don't have to use it, it's ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: Romance scene.
Just one little thing before I get to the lovely kissing: She tried to scream, but her vocal cords wouldn't seem to work. Perhaps change "wouldn't" to "couldn't"? Now that ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: The Lily caught in the Storm.
#1, I loved this! Perfect little snippet of what I think will turn out to be an awesome story! Let me know if you post more :) #2, There were ...
Jul 9, 2010 -
Re: Best Friends.
I read about it in the paper, in the subway, on my way to work. I knew I was right—didn’t want to be right, but knew I was. She was ...
Jul 8, 2010 -
Re: Peanut Butter
Unedited. It's hot man, I can't sleep. This is what happens when that is the situation. ~ Tucker was straining to get in the house by the time I stepped ...
Jul 8, 2010
