-
Re: Claire is Dead (Chapter One)
Hey, it's Drago. This is my attempt at a suspense/thriller. I hope you enjoy the story. --- The blood flowed so smoothly, pooling onto the archaic forest floor. The sweet ...
Oct 13, 2010 -
Re: Snarling Thunder
Hello, I'd like to review your story. I thought it was interesting. It was a little boring, but interesting none the less. I thought it was well written. However, one ...
Sep 9, 2010 -
Re: Amarants
Hello, I'm Drago, and I will be attempting a review. First I would like to say, that your writing style is interesting. It was very narrative, and in the beginning ...
Feb 14, 2010 -
Re: United we Stand
Hey Proto, it's Cpt J Luke F on war stories. What he means by posting in chapters is put it in different topics. I haven't been able to read all ...
Feb 12, 2010 -
Re: When He Fell
Hello, Drago here to review your story. When I saw this, I was thinking it would be another fallen angle story. It surprised me when I actually enjoyed reading it. ...
Feb 10, 2010 -
Re: Alice Who Lives Down the Rabbit Hole; Ch. 3
I really like the description in this story. Your characters are magnificently crafted into your story. I can't really see where the plot is going, but it is early in ...
Feb 7, 2010 -
Re: The Soul Scheme [Chapter One] Edited*
Thanks for all the advice and compliments. I am going to be working on the next chapter soon.
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: Total Eclipse [Prologue]
Very nice story. Kaedee pointed out some of the only mistakes in the prologue. I noticed another mistake, though. Dobliv entered combat with the mysterious man. The man grabbed Dobliv’s ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: The Soul Scheme [Chapter One] Edited*
Here is chapter one of a story I have just started working on. I hope you enjoy it. --- An ancient forest was lit by glimmering white lights that hovered ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: Hello People!
Welcome to the site other writer I made fun of. I would not have called you guys pansies if I would have known you were all going to join the ...
Feb 6, 2010 -
Re: Deleted
In the war stories forum we would say, "awesomesauce." Since I am not writing there I am forced to say more dull words that mean the same thing. The story ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: london payback part 2 of chapter 1 by Stuart Wight
I think this needs some work. Sorry if it seems like I'm bashing it, but no plot is evident. It doesn't seem like you thought the story through. The description ...
Feb 3, 2010 -
Re: The Hideaway
Sorry for the double post, but I just realized something. I can't finish this story on this site. I won't tell the reason, but it just won't work. Sorry about ...
Feb 2, 2010 -
Re: The Hideaway
Thank you guys for the advice. I will do my best to describe the world in the next chapter. I do have a question, though. Do I post my chapter ...
Feb 2, 2010 -
Re: The Hideaway
The idea of this prologue was not to go into the character. Some characters are just props. You don't create an attachment to them and use them to invoke some ...
Feb 1, 2010
