DrElefant

Okay, so it was good of you to inform us that you're thinking of entering this piece in a contest. That said, I shall be as honest as I can ...

Your piece seems to exhibit a poesy rather rare for writers our age (I'm 16 too). I find it emotionally arousing, as this is a good example of words being ...

The idea of contradicting lines is artistically sound, the poem itself is fundamentally proper. Kudos for using the poetic silences to insert the "This is humanity" succession. However, the lack ...